Saturday, November 13, 2010

Structure My Heart

Constructive criticism on this poem would be really great. I haven't decided if I like this one or not yet :)

Structure My Heart

structure my heart,
set it in motion,
take it away, and
there’s nothing to go one

go one the rhythm
or just on feeling—
step, step, pique
then turn and wheel

wheels turn until
they’re stopped
a dancer turns still
 in my heart

heart beats on the
rhythm of my feet

except it’s not a true rhythm
at all, poetry of the feet
completes my soul

soles of my feet hold
calluses that bleed, but the soul
in my heart is
here, free

free—and unafraid
of the world
find safety in a wooden landing
and a warm flighted whirl

whirls don’t ever stop
step, step, swirl
they structure my heart

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