Constructive criticism on this poem would be really great. I haven't decided if I like this one or not yet :)
Structure My Heart
structure my heart,
set it in motion,
take it away, and
there’s nothing to go one
go one the rhythm
or just on feeling—
step, step, pique
then turn and wheel
wheels turn until
they’re stopped
a dancer turns still
in my heart
heart beats on the
rhythm of my feet
except it’s not a true rhythm
at all, poetry of the feet
completes my soul
soles of my feet hold
calluses that bleed, but the soul
in my heart is
here, free
free—and unafraid
of the world
find safety in a wooden landing
and a warm flighted whirl
whirls don’t ever stop
step, step, swirl
they structure my heart
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